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<!--Generated by Squarespace Site Server v5.8.4 (http://www.squarespace.com/) on Sun, 06 Dec 2009 15:30:04 GMT--><rss xmlns:content="http://purl.org/rss/1.0/modules/content/" xmlns:wfw="http://wellformedweb.org/CommentAPI/" xmlns:itunes="http://www.itunes.com/dtds/podcast-1.0.dtd" xmlns:dc="http://purl.org/dc/elements/1.1/" version="2.0"><channel><title>Government</title><link>http://releaseme.squarespace.com/government/</link><description>Government press release tips</description><lastBuildDate>Tue, 12 Oct 2004 05:20:36 +0000</lastBuildDate><copyright></copyright><language>en-US</language><generator>Squarespace Site Server v5.8.4 (http://www.squarespace.com/)</generator><item><title>Would you? Will you?</title><dc:creator>Barney Lerten</dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 12 Oct 2004 05:15:34 +0000</pubDate><link>http://releaseme.squarespace.com/government/2004/10/11/would-you-will-you.html</link><guid isPermaLink="false">10501:72297:62452</guid><description><![CDATA[<P><FONT size=2>I doubt I deal with any single group of press releases more than the ones from government - the lawmakers, the PR folks, etc. Surprising I just added this page.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=2>Much of what I get is in stilted form, perhaps because that&#8217;s what happens when too many folks get review/veto power over a press release.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=2>But there&#8217;s also some basic issues of clarity, just about all the time. Good example today from a U.S. senator&#8217;s office, talking about legislation that passed and is on its way to the president for his signature.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=2>The lead talks of how the provision &#8220;would&#8221; do such and such, followed immediately by a quote from said senator, saying how it &#8220;will&#8221; put thousands back to work, etc. etc. Then goes back to &#8220;would&#8221; in the next paragraph.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=2>All begging the question - is the president expected to <EM>sign</EM> the bill? If it&#8217;s a certainty, then &#8220;will&#8221; is the proper term. If it&#8217;s not known, then &#8220;would&#8221; fits. </FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=2>A small point, but like a rock in the shoe to the reader, who knows something&#8217;s amiss but may be too busy to realize what. </FONT></P>
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